Ragnarok: Grand school(New story)

Just stop reading my storys I don't care if your brain bleeds becuase soon you shall die form brain internal bleeding /gg

good idea :< (wow never thought that would happen)
also, even if you are writeing for fun, why not try to make the story fairly good instead of horrid

Hey Lilly said she liked it so I will go wiht her XD so hahahaha now go leave this forum and never return

just cause one person says your story is good doesnt mean anything :s
and last i cheaked, i dont take orders from you.

Well, two things here one u have actually hated my other story becuase after lilly critisiesed so do you and also if u hate my storys stop readin it it is usless just to read a story that you know you will probably hate and it is just even more pointless to critis about it if the author doesn't care what you say that could affend him XP

Simba, I like the way you're developing the story and the focus you're giving to it with the school background. It is very fun to imagine how our characters would be like in a very early teenage time, and I like th detail of how you see your own character as a little boy. That's a cute thing ^^

As you have lotsof imagination, you need to "load" it somewhere, and you think that the best thing you can do is share it with us. Me likes the idea!, I do share with you guys my creations as my pictures or my future projects so you can all participate from it. That's a nice thing you're doing.

You know you have somewhat a kind of talent inside you, because writing a story isn't something easy. Anyways, it's like I told you the last time. Try to be a bit more descriptive, like for example, the way the classrooms are, the character's rooms, etcetera. I know you're not a writer, but maybe you could be a good one in the future. I really encourage you to look at the scenaries you've got in your mind and trying to describe the with all your details, how the sub-stories develop (i.e. personal relationships between characters like a romance, a competition, etc...). Don't be like Tolkien who forgot to describe Legolas' physical appearance and then Peter Jackson stuck him a blonde wig xDDDDD You get what I mean

Yeah I know truthfully these chapters are just practice to practice for me I am trying as u can tell. ALso thank you Lilly trust me my creativity is used in cooking also. I made a statue out of shrimp last summer It took alot of shrimp and time. But it was a birdy I was happy about it untill my brother ate a shrimp in the leg and it came tumbling down. Darn my brother.
But thank you again I have ot foucs more on what I am picturing in my head like you had said.